2014年12月11日 星期四

Desciption : If i can video down every moment

Meiti Riverside Park is probably the most beautiful place I went near Soochow University. It's near the Miramar mall. We went there at almost evening. We were sitting on the soft green grass, staring at the tranquil river. My friend and I were having a casual chat. Neither of us was looking at each other. As we talk, I can smell the refreshing fragrance of the grass carried by the gentle breeze. Not a strong wind. The warm breeze was like the soft fondle of the mother earth, the feeling went through my hair, i enjoy the touch, I enjoyed the smell.
  "Ring ring!" the sound of the bicycle passing by. Little kids with their helmet, moving their legs in a very fast speed (as they thought they are) I can hear the crackle of the wheels rotating on the road. They want to catch up with the adults in front of them. “Too eager for growing up" I thought in my mind." "Hey!  Wait! Ride slowly!" The worry parents behind the kids were shouting at them. Maybe that's exactly how parents are, they are always watching the rear of the children, not expecting them to turn back because they have their dream to pursue. You just have to let them go. "Ring ring!" This time is the special bike that was designed for two people to ride together. There was an old couple riding the bike. They don't have much expression on their faces, but I admired their peaceful atmosphere. Seeing lots of young couple breaking up, i wonder how they maintain their sweet taste of life for such a long time.
  Staring at the beautiful river, it was amazingly attractive. The golden orange sunshine reflected on the surface of the river, it shimmered beneath the sunset. It's not yet the time that the night falls, but who has threw the stars into the water? I supposed that some magical power is going to hang those stars on the sky after the sun goes down. The sunset! The sun! Oh the most remarkable on in the Meiti riverside park. At first it was like a fresh egg yolk, so orange, so plump. After a while, as if the mischief night angel has put a needle on it. The orange blasted out with a mixture of rose-pink, and dyed the whole sky. The round circle we saw earlier ago was vanishing. Suddenly, a splash of the water distracted me from the beautiful sunset. It was a fish jump out of the water I guess. So energetic it was, acting in a way to inform the night to come and call for the magic power to hang up the twinkling stars in the water to the sky.

  The beautiful place Meiti, I wonder what it is like in the other time of the day. I'm willing to spend my day, staring at the wonderful scene. It would be a worthwhile waste.

1 則留言:

  1. Hi Kelly,

    This is a simple yet relaxing sharing. Glad to know that you enjoy your college life. ^^

    As for this writng, subjects in some sentences are either missing or used in a wrong way. Take this sentence for example.
    "Staring at the beautiful river, it was amazingly attractive."
    The subject of the clause does not match the previous leading sentence. It should be "Staring at the beautiful river, I ...... " The subject should be "I".
    Hope you can figure the other mistakes out. ^^

    Amanda

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